|
Post by motorcitymade on Aug 31, 2011 19:26:44 GMT -6
www.fanfiction.net/s/7337044/1/RecompenseO.k. So WKW says I pimped out our own X rated Fan fiction over at FX. LOL. (And in a completely inappropriate thread). Too funny. Ah, well, Ripetebook needed a fix so I dropped a teaser about our story. So I thought I would repost if someone want to make freer comments here. God I wish this show was on HBO at 10 PM. From FX "Yes, Wkw is quite talented and prolific. She has posted quite a few pieces of Fan Fiction for which she asked me to help *a litte tiny bit*. Then she started a scenario with Raylan and Winona that was a little more adult content; and stalled shall we say, before the money shot. So of course I jumped it and made it *a lot* more adult content. So we *took care of* Raylan in just a few paragraphs but then poor Winona was left wanting. I talked Wkw into letting me have a go at Winona and it was extremely difficult to write as it was from Raylan’s POV. In the end She (Winona) got what she deserved. We worked together on it for a couple of weeks. I would push the envelope and Wkw would edit us back to something yummy rather than yucky. In the end there was only one paragraph that we didn’t edit. It came out completely *HOT* but also has some character complexities and revelations in it we, hope. It’s over at Fanfiction.net. The rating is M for mature audiences only, so you have to select that rating tab. "
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Aug 31, 2011 22:06:52 GMT -6
Are you trying to give me a f-ing heart attack? This really was awesome. I remember things like this and miss them, thanks to your story. Do you think we could ever see this scene on TV? You guys did a great job. (I read a lot of Sandra Brown so I wasn't shocked, but the aforementioned heart attack was a possibility since it involved Raylan.) Great job! (Is there going to be anymore of this?) A girl can only hope.
|
|
|
Post by wkw99 on Sept 1, 2011 3:41:38 GMT -6
;D Glad you liked it, monday. As to more, well, motorcity has something brewing. Not sure it will get quite as...graphic, but, knowing her, it might. LOL. As to continuing that particular fic...no plans right now, but you never know.
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Sept 1, 2011 13:24:56 GMT -6
Wow! I almost forgot! Awhile back, mcm and I were discussing the "two finger handshake."She brought it up in relation to a picture of Timothy from someplace. I said I'd like to come in contact with that. So, I had to laugh when I read your story. I"m assuming she put that in. You two are quite a pair.
|
|
|
Post by wkw99 on Sept 1, 2011 16:39:47 GMT -6
If it wasn't for the story I would have NO idea what you are talking about...so yes, that would be her. LOL.
|
|
|
Post by motorcitymade on Sept 1, 2011 16:49:30 GMT -6
Yes, That was my doing. I had totally forgotten about us laughing about that topic until I went to my Photobucket account to get my new "Oh you couldn't wait to get my cloths off" avatar loaded. I found that picture of "Raylan" that Clover said was "too Gynecological" for her. LOL. And I thought "OH MY GOD! I wrote that in!" ( there's a link to the pic on page two of the "suspicion confirmed" thread on this site)
Purely co-incidental. I had planned on writing him going down on her, but it's just too damned mechanically difficult in a closet. She's too short, propped on a pedestal or not. (I'm an engineer through and through- everything has to be functionally sound.)
The whole "I wish she was taller" idea was a little shout out to Anna Gunn, who co-starred (as Mrs. Bullock) with TO on Deadwood. In one of the commentaries, TO actually complains that Anna Gunn (5'10", 1.778m) is too tall. Well, both wkw and I are 5'8", (1.727m) ish and that pissed us off. (Well, it pissed me off and it bummed her out). So I wanted to give all tall girls something to smile about. That's right all you "petities"- several inches of extra height comes in handy sometimes. LOL
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Sept 1, 2011 18:34:51 GMT -6
You girls are lucky---I'm short. But I'm here to tell you that where there's a will, there's a way. It would be nice to be taller though. (Doesn't matter what your height is, you can still take advantage to the two finger handshake!)As far as him going down on her in a closet, well, my husband was a foot taller than me. We figured out some things that could be in the Kama Sutra. It was one hot story, regardless.
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Sept 1, 2011 19:01:41 GMT -6
mcm, I went back over to Suspicions Confirmed to see the photo again. I had forgotten what it looked like. Can you imagine----of course you can. I have got to stop doing this or I'll go off like a rocket!
I reread what you said about the CD. Somehow I didn't get all of what you said or it slipped my mind. The date of the post was July 11, and I was in the midst of a very busy summer. It just didn't stop this year. Anyway, you said that the contact info was old, but that you could get me a copy . Would love to have one. Let me know how you want to handle it. Thanks.
|
|
|
Post by motorcitymade on Sept 1, 2011 19:25:24 GMT -6
Friday night we're going over to the lead singers house for a deck party. Let me ask if he has any "Give me some skin" CDs left in print. ( the one with '2 finger handshake" and "pocket full of tens") If he does, I'll let you know and you can email me your address. Free of charge, BTW.
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Sept 1, 2011 19:31:03 GMT -6
I wouldn't think of it. I'll even cover p & h. Thanks much. I'll leave a message on this site.
|
|
|
Post by clovergirl on Sept 1, 2011 19:39:16 GMT -6
Ok, let me say that I loved this scene you guys wrote. I only have one problem with it and since you said you'd like opinions, I'll give you mine, lol. I loved Winona in it. She did everything right, lol, and still sounded like the Winona we know. Raylan on the other hand, (no pun intended), was not Raylan to me. I just can't imagine him talkin' dirty to Winona. Sexy talk, yes. Sex talk, yes. Saying I'm gonna lick your pussy", no. For some reason it just made me laugh instead of turning me on. But that's just a personal preference, I guess. Maybe I was just a little disappointed because what I thought was on the way was some real reciprication on his part, leaving his mouth way too busy for talking, lol. I think they could have worked out the mechanics of it, mcm, even in a small place, being two strong, healthy people. So now you need to write another scene!
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Sept 1, 2011 19:45:35 GMT -6
I agree---we need more! Sharpen your pencils!
|
|
|
Post by motorcitymade on Sept 1, 2011 21:21:12 GMT -6
Yeah, Clover, we really toyed around with whether to have the dirty talk. I think we spent several days trying different literary devices. Originally I had her just being wowed by the pounding he gave her, but then as wkw wisely pointed out: Come on, he's done that to her before, they were married for 6 years for christ sake.
The dirty talk was an means to an end. We wanted to get to the "When did you start doing that" segment.
The point is, they're at that all too short sexual infatuation part of the relationship; when you first start fucking. But they also know each other, so they're both comfortable enough to bring out a new bag of tricks - as long as they're in the literal and metaphorical "dark" about were they came from.
Then as soon as they're done pleasing the heck out of each other, what happens? Suspicion. And then they both have to admit...in the dark...that they are happy playing with their old toy in a new way..does that make sense?
Again, we tried it with him "just taking care of her"..she had a great orgasm and all...but it just wasn't unique or novel enough for Winona to ask if he learned the technique from Ava. ( Let's hope he gave her that treatment plenty during their marriage and more)
For Winona, it was a piece of cake. One look at her and you can see she's doesn't swallow. LOL. Nope, our Winona is definitely not a swallower. So, I knew where to go with her. And It would be just like her to come up with the ditzy... Something about Mary cover story on the fly.
Men are fascinated by getting their dicks sucked so really, the toughest part in the blow job segment was describing an orgasm from a man's POV.
Hope that all makes sense. Hey do you think I should copy this over at FX??? J/K LOL.
P.s.
As for the dirty talk..we tried a lot of different phrases. If you only knew some of the stuff on the cutting room floor. LOL.
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Sept 1, 2011 21:40:12 GMT -6
mcm, you have obviously given this a great deal of thought. I really appreciate your line of thinking--you get into this very deeply. I see where you are coming from. ( Please forget that I said "coming.")"You are right; men are pretty much obsessed with oral sex. My husband was very verbal about how he felt, and I think you captured the experience very well from a man's point of view.
(Please don't put this on FX. Half of the people over there would misinterpret. I'm talking about what the trolls would do with it.)I think they wait for their opportunity and then pounce. Let this be our little secret wonderfulness.)
|
|
|
Post by motorcitymade on Sept 1, 2011 21:50:22 GMT -6
I was kidding. I won't put this on FX. LOL.
|
|
|
Post by wkw99 on Sept 2, 2011 4:52:18 GMT -6
"playing with their old toy a new way" LOL. You have such a way with words, mcm. Oh, and ladies, BELIEVE her when she says that plenty of stuff ended up on the cutting room floor. As to another scene...well...Raylan DID make some promises about when they got back to the motel. We'll see. It might take a lot of wine. I can send you girls my address so you know where to send the alcohol. Although, mcm would likely end up bearing most of the burden, so maybe you ought to send it to her. I'd love one of those CD's too! (I'll gladly pay). These guys are going to want to know why they are suddenly 'in demand'. LOL.
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Sept 2, 2011 7:30:50 GMT -6
Yes, mcm. Just how much have you told your guy about all of this? I can see you explaining to the band why they're suddenly popular all over the country. "Well, you see...." What have we started here?
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Sept 2, 2011 13:13:25 GMT -6
Clover, As much as I enjoyed the story and appreciate the explanation for the use of certain phrases, I didn't think it sounded like Raylan., either. He is a man of few words. He wouldn't say it, he would just do it. (And of course, he would do it really well.) That being said, we know nothing of their married life. He obviously didn't say things like that to her in the past. Naturally she would wonder. I know I would have. As the writers have said, it was sort of a plot device. Anyway, it got me off, big time.
|
|
|
Post by wkw99 on Sept 2, 2011 14:44:39 GMT -6
I was a bit squeamish about the language, just ask mcm; but the point IS the shock value. It's supposed to be 'out of character'. LOL. Like mcm says.
I'm glad you liked the story despite that. ;D
|
|
|
Post by motorcitymade on Sept 2, 2011 15:21:19 GMT -6
I'll make him go down on her next time, I promise. Anything else you ladies want him to do? He's our puppet, after all. I've got them talking, sitting on a sofa eating ice cream so far; but there's a flashback to a much longer story, so I'm not even to to the point of sexual intrigue yet, probably not for a few weeks. I was thinking the cold vanilla Cheneys get sticky..not sure yet.
|
|
|
Post by clovergirl on Sept 2, 2011 16:37:40 GMT -6
I was a bit squeamish about the language, just ask mcm; but the point IS the shock value. It's supposed to be ' out of character'. LOL. Like mcm says. I'm glad you liked the story despite that. ;D Yeah, I get it, I just want him to STOP! LOL!
|
|
|
Post by clovergirl on Sept 2, 2011 16:38:17 GMT -6
I'll make him go down on her next time, I promise. Anything else you ladies want him to do? He's our puppet, after all. I've got them talking, sitting on a sofa eating ice cream so far; but there's a flashback to a much longer story, so I'm not even to to the point of sexual intrigue yet, probably not for a few weeks. I was thinking the cold vanilla Cheneys get sticky..not sure yet. OOOO, sticky and sweet! I'm in!
|
|
|
Post by clovergirl on Sept 2, 2011 16:41:42 GMT -6
Oh and by the way, I don't worry about Winona NOT getting hers. She's not a girl who would let a guy get away with that. More often the opposite for sure.
|
|
|
Post by wkw99 on Sept 2, 2011 17:05:44 GMT -6
LOL. Since when does a guy (any guy) not get his? I haven't met one yet. LOL. But, I do see Winona as insisting on dessert. (and yes, that's code in our house, as in 'You had dinner but I didn't get dessert' )
|
|
|
Post by mondayschild on Sept 2, 2011 18:43:49 GMT -6
I am totally speechless, and you know that never happens. I'm glad to hear that mcm's wheels are turning and that we have more to look forward to.
|
|